新航道雅思團(tuán)隊(duì)范文-在城鎮(zhèn)空地，該種樹還是改建房？

2016年8月27日雅思大作文題目

Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas in towns and cities than to provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

解析

本題問：在城鎮(zhèn)空地，該種樹還是該建房？可能很多學(xué)生會(huì)直接回答：當(dāng)然應(yīng)該種樹！原因是種樹可以讓環(huán)境更好更美，還可以讓人們的身體更加健康。這個(gè)答案自然是可以的，但若只寫種樹的優(yōu)勢(shì)，恐怕就無(wú)法顧及討論建房的優(yōu)勢(shì)了。然而，我們知道，如果一個(gè)城鎮(zhèn)無(wú)法為其居民提供足夠的住房，也是很有問題的。因此，從這個(gè)意義上，我們可以分別討論種樹的條件和優(yōu)勢(shì)，以及建房的條件和優(yōu)勢(shì)，然后得出結(jié)論：在住房條件已經(jīng)滿足的情況下，應(yīng)該種樹；但若住房不夠，城鎮(zhèn)空地還是應(yīng)該建房以滿足人們的現(xiàn)實(shí)需要。

那么，破解這個(gè)題目的關(guān)鍵就在于區(qū)分不同的城鎮(zhèn)。有些城鎮(zhèn)已經(jīng)有足夠多的住房，這些城鎮(zhèn)的空地應(yīng)該植樹，而對(duì)于那些住房不足的城鎮(zhèn)，建房顯然應(yīng)該是選擇。在解析8月20日雅思作文真題“慈善機(jī)構(gòu)應(yīng)該只幫助自己國(guó)家的人還是應(yīng)該幫助其他國(guó)家的人”時(shí)，唐老師提出，要善于在雅思作文題目中尋找“破題點(diǎn)”，即將題目中的關(guān)鍵詞分解成不同情況分別加以討論。比如，8月20日的雅思作文，關(guān)鍵就是將“慈善機(jī)構(gòu)”進(jìn)行分類：有著眼于地方問題的慈善機(jī)構(gòu)，也有著眼于全球問題的慈善機(jī)構(gòu)，不同的機(jī)構(gòu)，其基金流向就不同。這樣討論，就顯得言之有物，邏輯清楚。

新航道團(tuán)隊(duì)7分范文

Many people suggest that there should be more trees rather than houses in the open areas of cities and towns. While this suggestion is reasonable in many cases, it is not so in others.

開頭段，直接重述題目觀點(diǎn)，然后給出自己的觀點(diǎn)。注意體會(huì)唐老師如何對(duì)題目進(jìn)行重新表述。在雅思考試中，如果全文照抄題目原話，容易給考官一個(gè)印象，認(rèn)為你不具備改寫能力。
 while 這個(gè)詞尤其靈活，請(qǐng)各位烤鴨務(wù)必掌握其細(xì)微的用法。

For a city or town which has already had sufficient supply of housing, planting trees in the open areas is certainly a good idea. With green trees covering the streets, the city look much more beautiful. That is why I prefer living in southern cities where green trees are everywhere even in winter to living in northern cities. At the same time, more trees make the city air cleaner, because as we all know, trees take in carbon dioxide and release oxygen, which is beneficial to the health of the city dwellers. Statistics show that people living in a tree-covered city enjoy much higher life expectancy than those living within the concrete walls of tall buildings. 

本段講種樹在什么情況下是合理的，以及為什么要種樹。這里提出了兩個(gè)理由：一，種樹可以讓城鎮(zhèn)更美麗；二，種樹可以使人們身體更健康。
With green trees covering the streets = if green trees cover the streets = if the streets are covered by green trees. 這是一種很地道的獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)，這里用來(lái)替換過(guò)度使用的if從句。練習(xí)用with引導(dǎo)的獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)，可以豐富我們的句式。
Statistics show that...統(tǒng)計(jì)數(shù)據(jù)表明......

Yet, it would be stupid to ask people to plant trees in a city or town where they can not find enough houses to live in. Planting trees is undoubtedly more environmentally friendly, but getting a shelter to keep off rain and snow is always the top concern for all people. 30 years ago, in many cities and towns in China, for example, many houses were built as the urbanisation attracted a large number of people into the city. People did not focus on planting trees back then, not that they did not understand the importance of a healthy environment, but that they found they should put survival at the top of their agenda. 

本段講在某些情況下，比如當(dāng)城鎮(zhèn)居民無(wú)樓可住的時(shí)候，種樹并不是人們的選擇。然后用中國(guó)30年的情況作為例證。
...not that..., but that... 不是因?yàn)?，而是因?yàn)?br /> Put...at the top of agenda 把......置于議程之首；考慮......

There is no definite answer, therefore, to the question whether we should plant trees or build houses in the open areas of a city, because the answer is dependent on how developed the city is. In a highly developed city, planting trees is always a better choice, yet in a less developed city, houses are more needed than trees.

結(jié)論段：到底該種樹還是建房取決于城市的發(fā)展程度。在結(jié)論段，我們也要避免與前面部分表達(dá)重復(fù)。
... Is dependent on... = depend on... 取決于......

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