新航道雅思團隊范文-未成年人犯法是否該受同樣懲罰

2017年5月6日雅思大作文題目：未成年人犯法是否該受同樣懲罰

 

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

 

解析

青少年犯罪是全球性的話題，大家都在思考：為什么青少年會犯罪？為什么青少年犯罪逐年增加？青少年犯罪后到底該如何懲罰？這些話題也都是雅思考試中的熱門話題。唐老師總結(jié)了一下近幾年雅思作文中關(guān)于犯罪的話題，列舉如下：

 

1、2015/4/25；2015/6/18; 2013/11/9（3次）

青少年犯罪是否該受到與成年人一樣的懲罰？

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

 

2、2015/8/8

請改造過后的犯人給學(xué)生講犯罪的危害，可否？

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

 

3、2015/8/29; 2012/11/3（2次）

我們已經(jīng)沒有辦法阻止犯罪嗎？

People are afraid to leave their homes for fear of crimes. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crimes while others think that little could be done. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

 

4、2014/8/2; 2010/8/5（2次）

兒童犯罪增多的原因，怎樣處罰他們？

Children are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How to punish them?

 

5、2014/11/8

犯罪的原因到底是社會原因還是人性原因？

Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

6、2012/5/12

還有比監(jiān)獄更好的辦法來解決犯罪問題嗎？

In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

7、2016/1/14

青少年損壞公物后被罰掃街，這種處罰合適嗎？

A recent newspaper article report that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to the prison, Do you think this is right, or the young criminals should be sent to the jail? 

總結(jié)

 

回到本次考試，問的是青少年犯罪后是否應(yīng)該受到與成年人同樣的懲罰？這個考題在近幾年出現(xiàn)過3次，分別是2013年11月9日，2015年4月25日，2015年6月18日。另外，2016年1月14日的考題也與這個話題十分相似。關(guān)于如何懲罰青少年罪犯的話題，無非都是圍繞著是否應(yīng)該把他們關(guān)進監(jiān)獄，他們得到懲罰，受到教育，從而變成一個更好的公民，其他的辦法無非是讓他們免費做義工，讓他們在學(xué)習(xí)中改正錯誤。

 

很多同學(xué)很害怕犯罪話題，總覺得這個話題比較抽象，難以論證。事實上，唐老師認(rèn)為，雅思考試中，無論面對哪個話題，烤鴨都應(yīng)該在審題過程中，多想想這個話題與我們的日常生活有什么關(guān)聯(lián)（包括衣食住行，學(xué)習(xí)，友誼，交流等），而不是將話題引向高深的哲學(xué)或者某個專業(yè)領(lǐng)域。以這種方法，我們就會發(fā)現(xiàn)，沒有哪個雅思話題是遠(yuǎn)離我們生活的，我們都能順利找到入題的方法。唐老師就以本題為例，告訴大家，一個貌似高深的犯罪話題，如何可以輕松論證，四兩撥千斤，得到自己理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。

 

面對本次考試題目（乃至犯罪話題），即年輕人犯罪是否該受到與成年人同樣的懲罰，多數(shù)同學(xué)時間想到的可能是：應(yīng)該，因為這體現(xiàn)了社會公正；或者，不應(yīng)該，因為青少年應(yīng)該給機會改過自新。然后就開始冥思苦想，怎么論證這個社會公正問題，或者青少年如何改過自新的問題。這種思維方式，就把你的寫作帶入到了一個艱難的死胡同，最痛苦的情況可能是一條無法走出的死胡同。比如：社會公正問題論證起來，遠(yuǎn)不是一般同學(xué)可以用英語做到的（即使用漢語都有問題），于是，這樣的同學(xué)就開始哀嘆：這個題目真太難寫了！但是，事實是這樣嗎？非也，事實是你的思維出了毛?。耗銢]有真正把握住題目要求，也沒有掌握雅思寫作的正確思維方式！那么，如何轉(zhuǎn)換這個思維方式呢？我們是否可以這樣思考：青少年罪犯如果受到與成年人同樣的處罰（比如關(guān)進監(jiān)獄），對青少年是好還是壞？對這個社會是好還是壞？這樣一思考，我們就有話可說了。受到同樣處罰，有利于青少年盡快認(rèn)識錯誤，改過自新，從而對整個社會也有好處；如果從輕處罰，青少年則難以吸取教訓(xùn)，對他們的未來不利，對社會的安全也不利。這樣寫，你不僅避免了社會公正這樣抽象的死胡同，也會覺得250個字的空間太小了！

 

 

新航道團隊7分范文

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It is argued that, when a teenager commits a crime, even a serious crime such as robbery or sexual molestation, he should not be given the same punishment as an adult criminal. Instead of being put into prison, as these people would suggest, the young criminal should be ordered to do some community services so that they can learn from their mistakes. Quite contrary to this popular belief, I think all criminals, no matter how young they are, should be put into jail and how long they should stay there depends on the severity of their crime.

 

有些人認(rèn)為，當(dāng)青少年犯罪，即使是諸如搶劫和性騷擾等很嚴(yán)重的罪行，他們不應(yīng)該與成年罪犯受到同樣的懲罰。這些人會說，不要把年輕罪犯關(guān)進監(jiān)獄，而應(yīng)該命令他們做一些社區(qū)服務(wù)工作，這樣他們就能從錯誤中學(xué)習(xí)。與這個普遍的看法相反，我認(rèn)為所有的罪犯，無論年齡多小，都應(yīng)該關(guān)進監(jiān)獄，而在監(jiān)獄關(guān)多久取決于罪行的嚴(yán)重程度。

 

（1）開頭段引出話題和觀點。

（2）It is argued that... 有人認(rèn)為......

（3）Instead of 不是......

（4）Quite contrary to this popular belief... 與這個普遍觀點相反的是......

（5）Depend on 取決于......

 

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Firstly, prison is a good place for young people to think again what wrong they have done to other people. When put into jail, the young people will have little to do but read and think about their past. There are also many people who will help the young people understand why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these young criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On the contrary, if they are just ordered to community services, they may very likely end up repeating their mistakes.

 

首先，對于年輕人來說，監(jiān)獄是個很好的地方來讓他們反思對其他所做下的錯事。一旦進入監(jiān)獄，這些年輕人沒有什么事干，只能讀書并思考其過去。當(dāng)然，還有許多人去幫助這些年輕人明白為什么他們的所作所為是社會所不允許的。這樣，這些年輕的罪犯就更有機會回歸正常生活。相反，如果僅僅命令他們做社區(qū)服務(wù)工作，他們完全可能重蹈覆轍。

 

（1）本段討論原因一：監(jiān)獄是青少年罪犯反思的好地方。注意論證邏輯：監(jiān)獄是讓年輕犯人思考的好地方--監(jiān)獄里，他們有時間學(xué)習(xí)和思考--監(jiān)獄里還有人幫助他們認(rèn)識到錯誤--這樣，他們就有機會重新回歸正常--如果不這樣，他們可能重蹈覆轍。【是不是很簡單清晰的論證邏輯？】

（2）When put into prison, the young people will have nothing to do but read and think about their past. 這句中的put into prison是過去分詞短語，做時間狀語。如果寫成這樣也是可以的：When they are put into prison, the young people will...

（3）Come back to normal life 回歸正常生活。

 

 

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Secondly, for these young criminals, their experience in prison may help prevent them from committing more crimes. Once they have been put into jail, they will never forget this experience. So, next time when they think of doing anything wrong, their memory of the prison will immediately return and then they may stop. The memory of doing community services, I believe, does not have this function.

 

其次，對這些年輕的罪犯來說，監(jiān)獄里的經(jīng)歷會幫助他們避免犯更多罪行。一旦他們進入監(jiān)獄，他們將永難忘記這段經(jīng)歷。于是，下次當(dāng)他們想做壞事時，監(jiān)獄的記憶就會立刻浮現(xiàn)，這樣他們也許就住手了。我相信，做社區(qū)服務(wù)工作的記憶很難有這樣的功能。

 

（1）本段討論原因之二：監(jiān)獄經(jīng)歷對年輕犯人的心理影響。

（2）commit more crimes 犯更多罪行

（3）Think of doing... 想做......

 

 

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Therefore, my opinion is that, like an adult law violator, the teenager should also go to prison when he commits serious crimes because this experience in prison may enable them to become a better person. Other forms of punishment may be useful, yet I do not think they are as effective as prison.

 

因此，我的看法是，青少年如果犯下嚴(yán)重罪行，就應(yīng)該與成年罪犯一樣關(guān)進監(jiān)獄，因為監(jiān)獄的經(jīng)歷會讓他們成為更好的人。其他懲罰方式也許有用，但我認(rèn)為都沒有監(jiān)獄那么有效果。

 

（1）本段為結(jié)論段，重申觀點。

（2）Law violator 犯法的人

（3）enable them to do...使他們能夠做......

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