2021年5月8日托福獨(dú)立寫作真題范文 I 何時(shí)出國旅游

2021年5月8日 

托福獨(dú)立寫作

【考場題目回憶】

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older. 

【Introduction】

There are certain things that should be done when we are younger rather than when we are older. Visiting the overseas is one of such things. 

【本段解讀】

開頭段落真的不需要啰里八嗦。相反，應(yīng)該直截了當(dāng)，三言兩語迅速進(jìn)入正題。

【Body Para.1】

We certainly will lose the open-mindedness and will no longer be malleable when we reach an older age. At that age, visiting other countries in the world would not help developing our worldview—in terms of which youth governs maturity in the case of most people—and instead would only be expensive leisure and perhaps bring only vacant happiness. This is the case of my father, who always enjoys the journeys and who does not seem to grow a bit with the delight and excitement. Or the meaning of it may be so little that we may even regret spending the time, energy and money. This is the case of my mother, who visited Australia and kept complaining how uneconomical the travel was as she did not feel getting anything. And the trip to Europe was the last straw that kills her interest in traveling abroad. 

【本段解讀】

* 本段的內(nèi)容：論證為何不選“when we are older”。

* 寫作方法的重點(diǎn)在于加粗且高亮的部分作為例子是穿插在段落中的，而不是僵硬地把例子堆在一起寫在段落的最后。

【Body Para.2】

The above represents my pragmatic view indeed, the view that expects substantial returns of global traveling, yet this is not wrong. If we are to spend a considerable sum of money—traveling abroad is after all costly, we certainly should want some rewards that would help our life. If we are in substantial agreement over this view, we should agree that younger people can get the maximum benefit from traveling to the overseas. They see the world and grow. 

接下來是大家都熟悉的“陳詞濫調(diào)”：年輕人從游歷外國中獲得見識和成長。這一部分老師不示范了，不稀奇，大家都這么寫，大家也都會寫。只要注意強(qiáng)調(diào)這些收獲僅限于年輕人、是年輕人的專利就可以了。另外，別忘記舉例。

【本段解讀】

* 本段的內(nèi)容：論證為何選“when we are younger”的核心理由。

* 寫作方法是常規(guī)方法。

【Body Para.3】

There are other reasons why the earlier we make the journeys the better. First, traveling abroad is a major “manual labor”, and younger people have better strength and energy so that they can see as many places as possible, whereas older people, whose energy level is lower, may feel tired too soon and thus cannot enjoy themselves to the full. Second, better than traveling in a tour group—older people’s way, traveling with friends and being spontaneous—younger people’s way is more exciting and has more fun. In addition, language barrier is never a problem for younger tourists even though they barely speak a word of the local language because it is not awkward for them to use “sign language”—they may even have fun gesticulating at the local people. It would however be a problem for older travelers since the lack of language would make them uncomfortable or even embarrassed.

【本段解讀】

* 本段的內(nèi)容：補(bǔ)充說明為何選“when we are younger”，三個小理由合并在一個段落里簡單陳述。

* 寫作時(shí)注意：由于本段有三個補(bǔ)充理由，所以每個理由不要贅述，三言兩語點(diǎn)到即可。

【Conclusion】

It is certainly inadvisable that we do not travel abroad until someday when we are older. Instead, we should seize the youth and do it now.

【本段解讀】

結(jié)尾段落真的同樣也不需要啰里八嗦，而應(yīng)該直截了當(dāng)，簡單兩句完成任務(wù)就好。