2021年4月10日托福獨(dú)立寫作真題范文 | 關(guān)于省錢

2021年4月10日 

托福獨(dú)立寫作

【考場題目回憶】：

Your friend is going to reduce the living expenses. 

Which of the following way would you recommend to your friend and why?

- Find a roommate that can share the living expenses.

- Buy the new technology products less frequently.

- Shop for less expensive food to cook at home.

【Introduction】

Going through the three options, reduced shopping for new tech products may be crossed off the list immediately. it does help to save money—in fact, perhaps thousands per year; however, if this friend of mine is not a tech fan, who chases the latest updates of tech products, it would not help much since such shopping is not a regular thing. At this point, the choice has been narrowed down: to find a roommate or to cook at home, and I would not recommend home-sharing.

【本段解析】：

開頭段落不僅僅說明了題目的內(nèi)容，也干脆直接否定掉了第二個(gè)選項(xiàng)。

如果想要在開頭段落里直接否定一個(gè)選項(xiàng)，需要三言兩句就說出一個(gè)非常有力的理由去否定。

比如這里的“購買電子設(shè)備不是日常行為，所以難得買一次的東西，其實(shí)也不是意義上的節(jié)省日常生活開支”。

【Body】

Home-sharing can destroy the life of this friend. This is as serious as it sounds. It is never easy to find a person who you feel comfortable with under the same roof, and a wrong person can cause sufferings. Some people may think that for the sake of the reduced rent for sure, the reduced utility bills perhaps, and even the reduced petrol cost if the two persons can carpool, they would have tolerance to the wrong person. But to think is easy and to actually have the tolerance is not. Not only would the wrong co-tenant make the home-sharing life unpleasant on the mood, they would even increase living expenses.

【本段解析】：

這一段開始否定選項(xiàng)一。但是沒有直接排山倒海來一大段理由，而是先讓步說一下，然后再一句話反駁。

那么，具體的反駁的理由留在了下一段集中陳述。這樣的段落分配方式比較好。避免了因某一個(gè)段落過分長而讓讀者在長篇幅中感到不舒服的情況。

【Body】

My personal experience teaches a lesson that the tenant may have bad hygiene, making the common area of the house—the kitchen in particular—messy, greasy and dirty. The tenant also may have a wasteful lifestyle in the use of electricity and gas, and the bill-sharing situation would be reversed: it would be my friend, instead of the tenant, who shares the utility bill for the other--let me be clear: my friend would have no intention of taking advantage of the other person and certainly would not want to be taken advantage of. In this situation, if the extravagant co-tenant pays for only half of the usage—and this is the most likely allocation, since the usage by each individual in the house would not be precisely calculated, my friend would be paying more than his fair share. At this point, in what ways does home-sharing reduce the cost of living? As for the carpool, as is thought to be another benefit, what if the person is always a free rider?

【本段解析】：

這一段集中火力討論選項(xiàng)一的缺陷。具體的三個(gè)缺陷是一一針對上一段讓步內(nèi)容中的三個(gè)點(diǎn)來討論的。這樣也使得兩個(gè)段落在內(nèi)容上有聯(lián)系。

【Body】

So, I would recommend home-cooking and less eating-out or take-aways. First, unlike home-sharing, where the friend of mine would depend on another person, home-cooking saves money without that my friend would need another person’s help. 此處注意，其實(shí)并不需要就這句話里提及的比較展開討論，因?yàn)檫@個(gè)點(diǎn)已經(jīng)非常清楚無需贅述。

Second, cooking at home can be considerably economical compared with eating out or buying take-away food. 這里需要把considerably economical的具體情況展開，三句到四句話就足夠了。

【本段解析】：

這一段肯定是集中討論選項(xiàng)三的合理性。分成了兩個(gè)點(diǎn)，個(gè)點(diǎn)是針對選項(xiàng)一的比較得出，第二個(gè)點(diǎn)是選項(xiàng)三本身確實(shí)可以省錢。

【Conclusion】

So, if my friend is going to reduce the cost of living, my advice is to economize on eating. And I am strongly opposed to sharing accommodation.

【本段解析】：

結(jié)尾段落短小精悍，點(diǎn)到為止，無需長篇大論。