2021年3月24日
托福獨立寫作
【考場題目回憶】:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young children (under 12 years of age) would get benefits if they are taught different subjects by different teachers every day.
【Introduction】
The statement covers a rather wide age range of child learners, including both pre-school children and the school-age ones. Since the age of six or seven is the start of formal education, young children mentioned in the statement should refer to predominantly the older ones, who are in elementary school. And in many American elementary schools, teaching different subjects by one teacher, as has been a convention, has a number of drawbacks. In response, schools should have different teachers teaching different disciplines.
【本段解析】:
開頭段落首先明確了statement中模糊又寬泛的一個人群。兩句話明確了人群(并且使得這個人群合理)后,行文要“快”,不要繁瑣不要啰嗦不要拖沓,就是用盡量少的話語去把立場說清楚。比如這個開頭兩句話表明了立場,干脆利落清楚明確。
【Body】
Of the many limitations of the conventional arrangement, the first one may be that children are likely to get tired of seeing and listening to the one teacher all day and every day. Well, there may be the counterargument that children need the familiarity and sense of security that develop through bonding with the one same teacher. It sounds plausible yet does not make a strong case, because the intimacy can also develop between a child and each teacher but not necessarily only one teacher. In fact, when there is one teacher alone, children’s feeling may be just the opposite of the desired intimacy—boredom, as the teacher’s presence is on a highly repetitive basis of every class during every day, and the consequent aversion. This is one reason why schools need different teachers for different subjects.
【本段解析】:
本段的論證方式是“反證法”,就是通過論證某件事情的反面是錯誤來正面某件事情本身是正確的。在這一段里,作者通過說明one teacher是不利的來說明different teachers是有利的。
To further the argument above, it is not difficult to see how boredom negatively affects children’s learning. It actually is a no-brainer that bored children can hardly learn well or learn anything. Since knowledge varies from subject to subject in terms of the nature, the structure, as well as the level of difficulty and cognition required, teaching should be accordingly diverse in terms of its methods and other aspects. And one teacher alone can hardly achieve the diversity and, instead, is inevitably monotonous in his or her method and style, making children disinterested in learning.
【本段解析】:
本段的論證方式依然是“反證法”。
I think that many teachers also want to adopt the new arrangement that each of them teaches one discipline or two instead all disciplines. Many teachers have reported that specialized teaching benefits child learners more than teaching the whole broad range of areas. In the elementary schools where I work long as an external contract consultant, teachers are advised to specialize in teaching numeracy or teaching literacy, and in those schools, cross-disciplinary teaching was abandoned years ago when they found that children’s performance was dissatisfactory although their teachers sure seem to know all. The years since the change have witnessed improvement in children’s learning, and the differentiation and specialization scheme has proved right and better.
【本段解析】:
本段的論證方式是經(jīng)典的“正向論證”。同時,這一段也有了舉例論證。
【Conclusion】
There are problems with the conventional arrangement that children in elementary schools are taught different subjects by one teacher. Schools should instead designate different teachers for different disciplines.
【本段解析】:
結(jié)尾段落也要“快”,戒繁瑣戒啰嗦戒拖沓。相反,到了文末,一切細節(jié)之前都已經(jīng)被討論過了,收尾更要干脆利落清楚明確。
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