2021年3月13日托福獨立寫作真題范文 | 關(guān)于健康問題

2021年3月13日 

托福獨立寫作

【考場題目回憶】：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past.

【寫作思路】

經(jīng)典的今昔對比題。所以寫作過程中應(yīng)凸顯“對比”。這是貫穿全文的主線。同時，題目中的good health是一個寬泛的概念，所以考生可以通過細(xì)分成諸多方面展開寫作，于是文章的結(jié)構(gòu)就就很清晰。

本篇觀點為“不同意statement，持相反觀點，也就是認(rèn)為現(xiàn)在并不比過去更容易保持健康”。、二段作者闡述飲食條件和醫(yī)療條件進(jìn)步，看似同意題設(shè)觀點。第二段尾句卻給了讀者一個大反轉(zhuǎn)。第三、四段論述生活方式，包括時間、壓力、鍛煉等因素，給當(dāng)代人帶來的“危機(jī)”，從而論證其實過去更容易保持健康。

Decades ago, many parts of the world suffered famine and hunger（饑荒）, and in some of the places, it is only recently that people are fed. Decades ago, the variety of foods on an average Chinese household’s dining table was fairly poor; compared with the old times, the Chinese now can choose from a great range. In the western world, foods used to be filled with sugar and salt, and the trend of eating lightly（輕食潮流） is now prevailing（流行）. In terms of nourishment and diet the time has witnessed （見證）shifts — from having none to having some, from monotony to diversity, from indulgence to abstinence.

【本段解析】

由三組今昔對比排比直接回應(yīng)題目，尤其是在總結(jié)的那一句對應(yīng)了前文的排比。整個段落即是introduction引出話題，也闡述了當(dāng)代的生活條件在兩個重要的方面確實比過去更好。

Also, with good dietary supplements and medical service, people’s health increases: there have been all sorts of pills as complements to our bodily needs that foods alone cannot meet; and improved medical treating methods and medications help to reduce illnesses and to defeat diseases. These are the privileges（特權(quán)） those past generations did not have. Yet, food, nutrition and healthcare constitute （組成）only one part of the whole picture.

【本段解析】 

本段對段進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充：除了飲食和營養(yǎng)方面的進(jìn)步，還有醫(yī)療條件的進(jìn)步。至此，、二段看似作者同意題設(shè)觀點，實則為讓步段。第二段結(jié)尾作者用“Yet”給了讀者一個大反轉(zhuǎn)：雖然飲食條件和醫(yī)療條件有所進(jìn)步，但是這只能作為我們考量的一小部分。

The other major aspect is lifestyle, including one’s timetable, stress, exercise, as well as consumption of alcohol and tobacco. Compared with my grandfather in his thirties and forties, my father, when he was the same age, had a busier schedule. Today, as I am in my heyday of career, I hardly have high-quality private time. Seldom can I be actually offline outside office hours; seldom can I sleep in on my days off; seldom can I take my time to enjoy a good cup of coffee on a Saturday afternoon.【劃線部分是舉例也是通過舉例做對比，一石二鳥，一舉兩得。】All of these makes it less easy to keep fit and calm today than in the past, and in fact it is difficult to do so. What ensues from the out-of-control timetable is my high stress level, rendering（導(dǎo)致） me constantly alerted and nervous（精神的持續(xù)性緊張）. I believe this is not only my case but the case of many people of my age, and unlike our generation, the older generations were never in such a strained state. This is another reason why keeping healthy is less easy today. 

【本段解析】

本段的主旨為：生活方式也是影響健康的主要因素之一。本段占了全文較大的篇幅，是討論的重點之一。通過舉例論證的手法對比了祖父輩、父輩、到自己這一代在日程、壓力及生活作息等方面，闡述了“現(xiàn)在的人其實不容易保持健康”。

In addition, as people today have less private time, they exercise less, and as they suffer high levels of stress, they drink and smoke. This chain effect, as a result of the poor time management, is terrifying but true, and contrasts sharply（鮮明地） with the virtuous circle（良性循環(huán)） in the past. So, there is another apparent reason to believe that it was easier to maintain good health in the past than it is today. 

【本段解析】

進(jìn)一步對上一段提出的觀點進(jìn)行深入討論。采用說理論證，闡述不合理的時間管理、高壓環(huán)境以及不健康的生活習(xí)慣，各因素間的相互影響，惡性循環(huán)，都與過去形成了鮮明的對比。段尾再次強(qiáng)調(diào)過去更容易保持健康的觀點。

All in all, with those many factors taken into consideration, I find it hard to agree with the statement given. 

【本段解析】

總結(jié)段言簡意賅表明觀點，沒有贅述。

【全文語言特點】

全文中，句法結(jié)構(gòu)豐富又不做作油膩，用詞準(zhǔn)確自然，偶有故意三兩詞點睛。沒有堆砌語法現(xiàn)象、沒過生造長難句，也沒有使用生僻晦澀的詞匯，于是沒有給讀者造成閱讀困難。相反，作者使用了大量學(xué)生普遍認(rèn)識但未必會用的詞句，可讀性高。