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如何描述【比較】關(guān)系

2013 VS 2003，相對靠后的時間比較于更早的時間。

兩種寫作寫作思路：1）先簡單描述更早的時間，再著重描述靠后的時間。2）直接描述靠后的時間，同時與靠前的時間進(jìn)行比較。

Depicted in the pies are the change in the proportion of New Zealand’s online sales of retail sectors. Overall, people paid more on entertainment in 2013 than they used to do. 

1. The year of 2013 saw a situation vastly different from that of 2003. 

2. In 2013, film and music accounted for roughly one third of the total, an increased share compared with 2003’s portion (one-fifth). 

3. This largest sector  was in marked contrast with clothing, which had a shrunken share in 2013 as the percentage decreased by eight points and to sixteen. 

定語從句內(nèi)部有狀語從句。

整體采用“總（籠統(tǒng)）——分（具體）”。

1. A proportional drop also occurred to the sales of travel. 

2. In 2013, travel was no longer the largest sector, and the proportion was approximately 30%, smaller than that of 2003 by 6%. 

3. Lastly, there was no considerable change in the sales of books, whose share stayed at around one-fifth despite a decrease. 

定語從句內(nèi)部有狀語。

前2句采用“總（籠統(tǒng)）——分（具體）”。

In general, the variation between the two years was apparent. 

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