支招小作文（99） | 線圖 完全在過去 商店關(guān)張和開業(yè)數(shù)量

【開頭段】

1. Shown in the graph are the number of shops closed and that of shops opened in one country, and the period of 2011 to 2018 is studied. 

2. Overall, there was a disparity chiefly in two aspects between the two numbers. 

【主體部分】分成3段

First, they differed markedly at the beginning of the time, 6,500 and 8,500 respectively, and so in the end, with slightly over 5,000 and 3000 in 2018. Second, the two numbers varied throughout the time in their own ways. 

這一段總述。

然后說“關(guān)張”。

In terms of the shops closed, all other times witnessed either moderate fluctuations or stability, except the three-year period of 2014 to 2016. During the three years, a plunge – from 6,500 to the all-time low of roughly 700 – occurred first, and then there was a surge back to a high level – 5,000. 

你會發(fā)現(xiàn)：老章的寫法不是從左到右按照時間進(jìn)展寫。那樣寫又笨又生硬，肯定不得分。老章的寫法是，淺寫平淡的年份，專注寫特殊的年份，因為那是圖的【main features】。

然后說“開業(yè)”。

In terms of the number of shops opened, the initial few years are most notable, as it plummeted from 8,500 to 4000 and then sprang back to a high point of 6,000. However, during the subsequent years, the number fell to 4,000 again, stayed and slid further to 3,000. 

你會發(fā)現(xiàn)：老章在這一段的寫法是拆分。雖然是從左到右按部就班兩段時間，但是通過“the initial few years are most notable”來凸顯老章在寫圖的【main features】。以及，即使寫法普通，老章還是可以通過【用詞】和【狀語從句】來拿分。

補(bǔ)充：

線圖的時間軸，會出現(xiàn)三種。

按照出現(xiàn)的可能性排序：

1）完全在過去：

一般過去（在過去發(fā)生過）；

過去進(jìn)行（在過去持續(xù)發(fā)生）；

過去完成（比一般過去更早的過去+強(qiáng)調(diào)累積性結(jié)果）。

2）過去到現(xiàn)在：

一般過去（在過去發(fā)生過）；

過去進(jìn)行（在過去持續(xù)發(fā)生）；

過去完成（比一般過去更早的過去 + 強(qiáng)調(diào)累積性結(jié)果）；

現(xiàn)在完成（強(qiáng)調(diào)累積性結(jié)果）。

3）過去到將來：

一般過去（在過去發(fā)生過）；

過去進(jìn)行（在過去持續(xù)發(fā)生）；

過去完成（比一般過去更早的過去 + 強(qiáng)調(diào)累積性結(jié)果）；

現(xiàn)在完成（強(qiáng)調(diào)累積性結(jié)果）；

一般將來時（注意可能性的大?。?/p>

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