支招小作文（94） | 柱圖 兩城全年降雨量

* 柱圖（可變線）

【審題】：

* 形式是柱圖，但是因?yàn)闀r(shí)間（月份）是連續(xù)的，所以，可以轉(zhuǎn)化為線圖。

* 也可以按照柱圖去寫，還可以結(jié)合起來寫。

* 如果按照柱圖的內(nèi)容思路：

分組：

組一：Moscow > San Francisco: May, June, July, August, September, October。并且，July和August特殊，SF的降雨量為零。

組二：San Francisco > Moscow: January, February, March, April, November, December。并且，April特殊，兩地的降雨量差別不大。

* 如果按照線圖的內(nèi)容思路：

Moscow：降—升—降的整體趨勢，對比于San Francisco：降—升的整體趨勢

不但要寫單條線本身的變化，還要寫線之間的關(guān)系，這時(shí)候就引入了柱圖的內(nèi)容思路：

組一：Moscow > San Francisco: May, June, July, August, September, October。并且，July和August特殊，SF的降雨量為零。

組二：San Francisco > Moscow: January, February, March, April, November, December。并且，April特殊，兩地的降雨量差別不大。

Shown in the chart is the comparison of average annual amount of precipitation between Moscow and San Francisco // the comparison between Moscow and San Francisco in terms of their average annual amounts of precipitation. 

* 內(nèi)容方面：當(dāng)圖表中是兩個(gè)或者三個(gè)主體之間的關(guān)系時(shí)，可以直接理解為比較關(guān)系。

* 詞匯方面：由of加名詞構(gòu)成的修飾語（同等于形容詞）。

In Moscow, the general tendency over a year is that the rainfall is relatively large (over 80 millimeters) in the mid-year three months and smaller in the other months (less than 60mm). Different from // Differing from that of Moscow, San Francisco’s rainfall follows a down-and-up trend, and the maximum amount is almost 120mm, compared with the minimum of zero millimeters, which is in July and August. 

* 語法方面：第 一個(gè)句子里，名詞性從句（構(gòu)成方式：that+完整句子）作為表語。

* 語法方面：兩個(gè)句子的主語不同。

* 文脈方面：第二個(gè)句子開頭的狀語，使得兩個(gè)句子產(chǎn)生聯(lián)系，構(gòu)成文脈，等CC（連貫）方面的分?jǐn)?shù)。

* 語法方面：第二個(gè)句子的結(jié)尾，也是狀語。

* 詞匯方面：表達(dá)程度的形容詞或副詞。

* 詞匯方面：由of加數(shù)量詞構(gòu)成的修飾語（同等于形容詞）。

It is worth noting that Moscow has greater amounts of rain than San Francisco in six months of a year – May, June, July, August, September and October. The minimum difference is roughly 40mm, which is in May, and the difference is remarkable, in June, July, August and September, and it is over 80mm. In the other months, the opposite is the case, and the difference ranges vastly from about 30mm to approximately 70mm except inApril, when the two cities have roughly the same rainfall (nearly 40mm). 

* 語法方面：第 一個(gè)句子里，名詞性從句（構(gòu)成方式：that+完整句子）作為主語，it為形式主語。英語中，形式主語it用來避免“頭重腳輕”的句子。

* 內(nèi)容方面：寫完趨勢/格局之后補(bǔ)充一些數(shù)值。

* 詞匯方面：表達(dá)程度的形容詞或副詞。

Overall, the precipitation varies between Moscow and San Francisco over a year // Moscow and San Francisco differ in terms of their rainfall over a year. 

* 圖表中，信息亂的時(shí)候，總述就寫“有區(qū)別，不一樣”。

* 全文打分的四個(gè)方面：內(nèi)容方面、文脈方面、詞匯方面、語法方面。