支招小作文（92） | 流程圖 以甘蔗為原料制糖

* 流程圖，選自《劍橋雅思真題集16》

Shown in the diagram is the procedure of making sugar from sugar canes. Overall, it is complex, taking multiple steps and using many pieces of equipment. 

* 流程圖的總述就寫過程是否復(fù)雜繁瑣。還可以補(bǔ)充說用到的工具/器械的多少。

* 有些步驟可能合并成更少的句子。

First of all, when sugar canes ripen after 12 to 18-month growth, they are ready for the harvesting, which is done either by large machinery or by manual labor. The sugar canes are then put through a crushing machine to produce juice. At the next step, the juice goes through a funnel in which a limestone filter purifies the juice. The evaporator is the device in the next step, and it, using heat, makes syrup from the purified juice. With the syrup made, the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from the syrup. Once drawn/extracted from the syrup, the sugar crystals will be put into a cylinder to dry and cool, which is the final step of the whole process.

* 獨(dú)立步驟避免用定語從句描述。定語從句只用于補(bǔ)充說明。

* 主體部分的這個(gè)段落中，老章提醒注意黃色高亮部分是狀語的特殊形式，用于讓流程之間連貫。

* 主體部分不一定要分成多個(gè)段落，僅寫一個(gè)段落也是可以的，尤其是當(dāng)流程之間的關(guān)系緊密的時(shí)候。

* 能不能沒有結(jié)尾段落？可以。但是不能缺少的是對于圖表的總述（在開頭段落的第二句）。