支招小作文（91） | 地圖 某公園的過去與現(xiàn)在

* 地圖，選自《劍橋雅思真題集14》

Shown in the pair of maps are the original layout of the Grange Park and its current view. Overall, there have been evident changes. 

* 表達程度的形容詞，不僅僅有“大”、“小”。

* 選擇合適的視角去寫作：1）俯瞰/鳥瞰（“上帝”視角）對應(yīng)“東南西北”；2）置身其中（“訪客”視角），對應(yīng)“前后左右”和“東南西北”；3）混合視角，前兩種視角混合。

建議用第2）種視角，更好寫作。

* 不要依次寫兩張圖，而是拿后一張圖比較于第 一張圖。

* 有些信息需要“模糊處理”。

Today, a visitor, entering the park through either the Eldon Street entrance or the Arnold Avenue entrance, will no longer find the fountain but instead immediately see a rose garden that is situated/positioned. in the central area of the park. In addition, there are seats surrounding the garden. As the visitor reaches the garden, he or she will find an amphitheater a few steps to the westas the replacement of themusical stage. Right next to the theater is another rose garden of a smaller size, which is the original garden near the north entrance. In addition, the rose garden on the south side and all the seats have been removed. 

The area that is east of the central rose garden also has had a tremendous change. Where there used to be a glasshouse, there now is a water feature located in the southeast corner. Opposite it and across the park, a cafe and a children’s playground have replaced the aquatic plant pond and the rose garden. What is more, there is an additional underground car park, which provides another entrance for visitors, and it is in the immediate vicinity / proximity of the water feature.

* 注意時態(tài)：現(xiàn)在完成時。

* 主體部分的兩個段落中，黃色高亮的部分值得注意：是把過往的情況容入到描述現(xiàn)在情況的句子中去寫，很考驗語法和句型的使用。

Overall, there have been evident changes in a number of places, and the park’s layout has been simplified.

* 對于地圖的總述，就是寫變化的大小。