支招小作文（89） | 表+餅 博物館改造

* 表+餅，選自《劍橋雅思真題集11》

Introduction

Given in the table is the change of number of Ashdown Museum’s visitors between the year before and the year after the renovation, and the charts illustrates the change in the visitor satisfaction.

*解析

* 開頭段落介紹圖表的主題。如果是組合圖表，那么就分成兩個分句寫。

* 第 一個分句的開頭下劃線處是倒裝現(xiàn)象。

Body

After the refurbishment, the number of visitors increased to 92,000, compared with the previous 74,000. In fact, not only the number of visitors but also the overall satisfaction increased. Satisfied patrons, regardless of their level / degree of satisfaction, accounted for three quarters after the renovation, particularly thanks to the 20% increase in the proportion of highly satisfied visitors. Accordingly, the overall dissatisfaction rate saw a sharp fall from an alarming level (50%) to 20%, and that improvement is chiefly attributed to the 25% reduction in the portion of visitors who show moderate discontent. In addition, those who give no response to the survey remained an insignificant portion of all visitors.

*解析

* 由于表格中的內容十分簡單，一句話就寫完了，所以，沒有單獨寫一個段落。

* 第二句話的開頭處的“in fact”，老章提醒：尤其值得注意。這是一個用來引導“遞進關系”的邏輯連接詞。

* 第三句話中，句尾是由“thanks to”引導的“原因狀語”。

* 第四句話的開頭處的“Accordingly”，老章也是提醒：尤其值得注意。這是用來描述“基于前一句所述，而對應發(fā)生的情況”的邏輯連接詞。

* 第四句話中，后一個分句中的“that improvement”指代的是前一個分句中的“a sharp fall”，老章提醒：仔細琢磨，為什么“fall”是“improvement”？

* 最后一句話的開頭處，用了“in addition”。老章覺得你一定懂，無需贅述。

* 最后，老章提醒：1）文中3處邏輯連接詞，以及指代，用來連貫文章脈絡。2）主體部分段落中，下劃線的部分是想你注意句子主語的變換。

Conclusion

Overall, the improvement in the two dimensions has been substantial after the refurbishment.

*解析

* 對于圖表的總述是小作文必不可少的內容。

* 當然，所有紅色標出的詞匯，要查、要記、要學、要用。