支招小作文（88） | 線圖 上下兩張圖

* 線圖，選自《劍橋雅思真題集14》

Introduction

Shown in the first graph are the changes of ownership of three electrical appliances, and the second graph depicts the number of hours spent doing housework chores. The statistics are about an anonymous country and the period of 1920 to 2019. * 把地點和時間拆出來，單獨寫一句，避免上一句帶地點、帶時間，太繁瑣。 Overall, those electrical appliances were becoming increasingly common, and doing housework cost less and less time. * 不是機械陳述數(shù)值，而是去寫數(shù)據(jù)體現(xiàn)出來的事實。

Body

First, despite a slight decrease between 1960 and 1980, the ownership of washing machine increased by over 30% and to over 70% in 2019. Second, in 1920, 30% of the country’s households owned a vacuum clear. Afterwards, this appliance was becoming increasingly common at a steady pace, and its ownership exceeded that of washing machine after 1960 and had reached 100% by 2000. The case of refrigerators was special. The refrigerator was extremely rare in 1920, and the subsequent 40 years witnessed a surge to 90% in its ownership. In 1980, every household in that country owned a refrigerator, and it was the first appliance that is owned by all households in that country. In addition, with the three appliances becoming increasingly common, people spent only 20 hours doing housework in 1960 and 10 hours in 2019, compared with 50 hours in 1920.

*解析

* 第1句：陳述關(guān)于洗衣機的情況。因為情況簡單，所以僅僅一句。

First, despite a slight decrease between 1960 and 1980, the ownership of washing machine increased by over 30% and to over 70% in 2019.

注意：狀語里被省略的邏輯主語應(yīng)與主句主語一致。同時，主語與動詞也應(yīng)邏輯一致。 

* 第2、3句：陳述關(guān)于吸塵器的情況。因為情況略有特點，所以用了略長的篇幅。

Second, in 1920, 30% of the country’s households owned a vacuum clear. Afterwards, this appliance was becoming increasingly common at a steady pace, and its ownership exceeded that of washing machine after 1960 and had reached 100% by 2000.

* 第4、5、6句：陳述關(guān)于電冰箱的情況。因為情況很有特點，所以用了更長的篇幅。

The case of refrigerators was special. The refrigerator was extremely rare in 1920, and the subsequent 40 years witnessed a surge to 90% in its ownership. In 1980, every household in that country owned a refrigerator, and it was the first appliance that is owned by all households in that country.

注意：

1）在寫特殊的東西之前，可以寫一個短句，調(diào)整一下信息的節(jié)奏。并且，形成“總—分”結(jié)構(gòu)。

2）電冰箱的這一部分里，多處出現(xiàn)并非機械陳述數(shù)值，而是寫出數(shù)據(jù)體現(xiàn)出來的事實。

* 第7句：陳述關(guān)于做家務(wù)雜事用時減少的情況。僅僅一句，所以沒有單獨寫成一個段落。

In addition, with the three appliances becoming increasingly common, people spent only 20 hours doing housework in 1960 and 10 hours in 2019, compared with 50 hours in 1920. 

注意：用compared with描述兩種情況之間（而非同一個主語做的兩件事情）的比較時，不存在邏輯主語一致。