支招小作文（85） | 餅圖4 六個大餅

* 餅圖，選自《劍橋雅思真題集11》

【內(nèi)容思路】

通過找異同（similarities and differences）確定分組（groups）：

* North America and Europe一組。

* South America、Africa、Central Asia、Southeast Asia另一組。

* 同時，第二組內(nèi)再進一步分組：1）Africa、Central Asia、Southeast Asia一組，和2）South America、單獨一組。

Introduction

Shown in the charts is how water is used in six regions of the world, and there are three uses — the industrial use, the agricultural use, and the domestic use. Overall, there are apparent similarities and differences between the six areas // the six areas can be divided into three groups. 

* 第 一句的句子開頭的倒裝，可以當(dāng)成套話用。

* 第 一句的句子末尾同位語。

Body（按照【內(nèi)容思路】來寫）

North America and Europe are highly similar. In these two areas, roughly half of the usage of water goes to industrial production, and the agricultural sector uses 30% to 40% of the total usage, and water used in households account for 13% to 15%. Likewise, there is a high level of similarity between Africa, Central Asia and Southeast Asia. Agriculture uses over 80% or even almost 90% of the total usage of water, and accordingly, the other two sectors use rather small portions of water, and the individual percentage ranges from 5% to 12%. 

* 這個段落遵循“總—分”原則展開寫作。第 一句“濃縮”為總寫，后面把“濃縮”的內(nèi)容解釋清楚。第三句用樣為濃縮總寫，后面的內(nèi)容把細節(jié)解釋清楚。

* 下劃線的部分構(gòu)建了信息之間或句子之間的聯(lián)系。建立語句間或信息間的聯(lián)系很重要。

South America is a special area. Although it is another area where agriculture is the predominant water user, which takes 71% of the total usage, it has the greatest proportion of domestic use of water (20%) among all the six regions.

* 這個段落依然遵循“總—分”原則展開寫作。第 一句“濃縮”為總寫。后面一句把“濃縮”的內(nèi)容解釋清楚。

* 首先注意：不要在數(shù)據(jù)上面面俱到，要有數(shù)據(jù)上的取舍。取舍的原則很簡單：main features一定寫，其它可以按需取舍。

* 主體部分的兩個段落中，句子主語或開頭的多樣性是得分點。文中分別用了地區(qū)名、用水部門、用水量、百分比等概念為主語。

* 兩個段落中，總寫的句子都是采用了“短句”的模式，從而在文中形成長句與短句的搭配。

Conclusion

In general, there are apparent similarities and differences between the six areas.