支招小作文（81） | 柱圖6

* 柱圖，選自《劍橋雅思真題集13》

Introduction

Shown in the chart are the percentages of two types of housing – the owned and the rented – in England and Wales, and the investigated period spans from 1918 to 2011. The general tendency is evident. Owned accommodation increased over the years while rented accommodation decreased accordingly.

* 第 一句話的倒裝現(xiàn)象，之前已經(jīng)無數(shù)次提及。得到GRA語法分?jǐn)?shù)。

* 時間和地點(diǎn)狀語沒有全部堆在一個句子的尾部，而是把圖中的時間跨度信息寫成一個單獨(dú)的分句。得到GRA語法分?jǐn)?shù)。

* 第三句話是一個起到信息引導(dǎo)作用的短句，隔在兩個較長的句子之間，用來調(diào)整段落的行文節(jié)奏。得到CC文脈分?jǐn)?shù)。

Body

With increasing numbers of people purchasing homes, home ownership had increased to 50% by the year of 1971. Accordingly, the proportion of households that rent housing had a downtrend, falling to 50% in 1971. It is also noteworthy that there was a wide disparity between the two original levels – 78% versus 22%.

* 第二句的開頭的accordingly非常重要：這個副詞把第二句和第 一句建立起了聯(lián)系。得到CC文脈分?jǐn)?shù)。

* 這個段落里出現(xiàn)的數(shù)值描述僅有3處（對應(yīng)舍棄了許多沒有特點(diǎn)的數(shù)值），足夠覆蓋前5組柱子（10個數(shù)值）的主要特征。得到TA內(nèi)容分。

* 這個段落還有另外一個寫法，如下：

The year of 1971 is particularly noticeable, since it witnessed equal shares of both types of households. Before that year, home ownership displayed a steady increase, while renting decreased accordingly. In addition, the  vast disparity between the two original levels – 78% versus 22% – is also noteworthy. 

* 這個寫法就是第 一句和第二句的內(nèi)容邏輯與上一個段落的前兩個句子不同，但是殊途同歸。

During the subsequent years, households in owned accommodation showed continued overall increase and outnumbered households in rented accommodation. However, the year of 2011 is notable. In that year, there was a decline – albeit negligible – in the proportion of households living in their own property, and households in rented homes had a corresponding proportional increase. 

* 尤其注意第二個句子，又是一個起到信息引導(dǎo)作用的短句，隔在兩個較長的句子之間，用來調(diào)整段落的行文節(jié)奏。得到CC文脈分?jǐn)?shù)。

* 文中所有高亮標(biāo)出的詞匯都很重要，值得記憶以及勿忘使用。

Conclusion

* 本文無conclusion。如果在開頭段落里有個對于圖表的宏觀描述，那么就可以沒有總結(jié)性的段落。注意：是“可以沒有”，不是“必須沒有”。