支招小作文（75） | 表格2:同時(shí)不同項(xiàng) 橫縱雙維度

類型：表格

寫(xiě)作關(guān)鍵：

* 描述【比較】，存在于【全脂和低脂之間】，也存在于【年齡段之間】。

* 數(shù)據(jù)加工：找出某種規(guī)律作為內(nèi)容的“底層思路”。本文的思路是：以對(duì)于全脂或低脂的偏好作為原則，不同的年齡段之間存在異同。

The table below gives information of the weekly level of consumption by different age groups in ordinary milk and butter, healthy alternative (HA) milk and butter in one European country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

# Introduction

In the table is the information of the weekly amounts of two dairy products – milk and butter –consumed by people of different ages in a European country. Overall, the consumption of each product varies evidently from one group to another. 

* 老生常談之劃線部分是倒裝現(xiàn)象。注意動(dòng)詞與后面內(nèi)容的單復(fù)數(shù)保持一致。

* 在【introduction】時(shí)就陳述對(duì)于整個(gè)表格情況的總述。

* 注意vary這個(gè)不及物動(dòng)詞的用法。

# Body

In terms of milk, it is noticeable that the 26-45 group and the oldest group, different from the other two groups, have a clear preference for the low-fat type, which accounts for 70% or 80% of their weekly total consumption. Another feature is that older people drink more milk than younger people. People under the age of 25 drink only 1.2 liters per week – a small amount compared with the consumption of the other groups.

* 這一段寫(xiě)milk。至此可以看出老章的整體思路是先寫(xiě)milk再寫(xiě)butter，這是一個(gè)常用的分段思路（當(dāng)然有別的分段思路，以后展示）。

* 第 一個(gè)句子是一個(gè)形式主語(yǔ)（it）指代名詞性從句（that xxxxx）的句型。

* 第 一個(gè)下劃線處：【插入的狀語(yǔ)】，說(shuō)明“the 26-45 group and the oldest group”是以“different from the other two groups”的【方式】“have a clear preference for the low-fat type”。

* 第二個(gè)句子是一個(gè)主系表結(jié)構(gòu)的句型。其中，表語(yǔ)部分為名詞性從句。

* 第二個(gè)下劃線處：破折號(hào)引出的同位語(yǔ)，去近一步說(shuō)明“only 1.2 liters per week”。

* 綠色加粗字體的詞/詞組是老章精選，值得記憶。

In terms of the consumption of butter, the full-fat type and low-fat type have balanced shares in the two older groups. In the two younger groups, there is a clear inclination to a certain formula. However, full-fat butter is preferred in the youngest group, accounting for 60% of the weekly consumption, and the opposite is the case with the 26-45 group. In addition, the 45-65 group is noteworthy, as its consumption (60 grams) is markedly higher than that of the other groups.

* 這一段寫(xiě)butter。

* 措辭上尤其值得注意的是“the two older groups”和“the two younger groups”這兩個(gè)說(shuō)法簡(jiǎn)化了具體年齡，省去了麻煩。

* 第 一個(gè)下劃線處：【伴隨狀語(yǔ)】，說(shuō)明“full-fat butter is preferred in the youngest group”的具體情況。

* 第二個(gè)下劃線處：是英語(yǔ)中常見(jiàn)的一種說(shuō)法，意思是“情況相反”。

* 綠色加粗字體的詞/詞組是老章精選，值得記憶。

# Conclusion

In general, the two types of each product have different levels of popularity in different groups.

* 結(jié)尾段落再換個(gè)說(shuō)法總結(jié)一下全文。