支招小作文（74） | 表格1：僅8個數字 且年份是陷阱

類型：表格（這個表格的特點是數據量很小，僅有8個數字）

寫作關鍵：

描述【比較】

The table below shows the changes of the percentage of visitors in 8 great countries that most international tourists visited in 2009 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

【內容思路】

* 數據加工：找出某種規(guī)律作為內容的“底層思路”。本文的思路是：三組很明晰：1、增長的（有多有少）；2、下降的；3、沒變的。

* 尤其值得注意的是*：雖然題目中給出了2009和2010年兩個年份，但是【比較】僅存在于【國家之間】，并不存在于年份之間。為什么呢？因為表格中的數字是兩個年份的差值，而不是分別列出了兩個年份的數字。

# Introduction

In the table is thestatistical presentation (in percentage terms) of the changed popularity of 8 Great Countries with visitors between 2009 and 2010.

* 下劃線部分是倒裝形式，注意動詞的單復數由后面的內容（被倒置的主語）的單復數決定。

* statistical presentation 意為“數據形式的呈現”。

* in percentage terms 意為“以百分比的方式”。

# Body

Except in the UK, where there were 4 percent fewer visitors in 2010, and France, whose number of visitors stayed unchanged, there is either a surge or a marginal increase of popularity in the Great Countries. Germany stood out, as its popularity shot up by more than 10 percent. Following Germany closely, the US and China were the other two obviously more desired tourist destinations, both of which received nearly 10 percent more visitors.

* stand out 意為“表現突出”。

* shoot up 意為“猛漲”。

* 老章提醒注意：狀語的多種形式：1）狀語從句，即本段中的“as its popularity shot up by more than 10 percent”、2）動詞分詞短語作為狀語，即本段中的“Following Germany closely”。

* 段落中的三處非限定性定語從句用了三種不同的引導詞：1）where、2）whose、3）which。

The growth was moderate in Spain, as the country’s reception of visitors rose by 6 percent. Meanwhile, it is notable that there was a minor increase of 1 percent in Turkey and a slightly bigger increase (2 percent) in Italy.

* 措辭時尤其注意表示程度的形容詞/副詞，和已經帶有程度概念的名詞或動詞，以及句型的（刻意）變化。

# Conclusion

Overall, the changed popularity varied from country to country.

* 老章提醒：vary（意為“有區(qū)別”）這個不及物動詞的用法值得注意。比如句中的意思是“變化的受歡迎程度在國家與國家之間有區(qū)別”。舉例：The choice of color varies from person to person. 意思是“對于顏色的選擇在人與人之間有區(qū)別”。

* 籠統(tǒng)總結。尤其適合的情況：數據之間關系的規(guī)律不是那么明顯，又不能去重復主體部分已經說過的內容。