支招小作文（66） | 餅圖2：不連續(xù)年份之間的比較

* 數(shù)據(jù)圖：【餅圖】

* 主要描述：【比較】

注意：

1）比較關(guān)系存在于每個(gè)餅內(nèi)部的板塊之間，也存在于餅與餅之間

2）。兩個(gè)不連續(xù)的年份之間沒(méi)有線性的增減關(guān)系，而是只是兩個(gè)獨(dú)立年份之間的比較。

# Introduction

Shown in the pair of pie charts are the online sales of four retail sectors in New Zealand, and two years – 2003 and 2013 – are investigated. Overall, there are apparent similarities and notable differences between the four sectors.

* 本段第 一句是倒裝現(xiàn)象。這個(gè)倒裝句型可以當(dāng)成套話記住和使用。Shown in the xxxx are/is xxxxxxx.

* 第 一句中（由兩個(gè)破折扣隔開(kāi)的部分）還出現(xiàn)了英語(yǔ)里常見(jiàn)的同位語(yǔ)現(xiàn)象。

* 第二句對(duì)于圖形的總述時(shí)，尤其需要搞清楚究竟是什么之間的異同。

# Body

The year of 2013 witnessed that books and film/music accounted for greater proportions than they did in 2003. In 2013, the category of audio-visual items made one-third – the largest portion – of the sales of all four categories, compared sharply with the one-fifth in 2003. In terms of books, 2013’s figure – 22% – was slightly higher than 2003’s 19%.

* 本段的得分重點(diǎn)之一在于句子主語(yǔ)/句子開(kāi)頭的多樣性，使得整個(gè)段落的語(yǔ)言不單調(diào)。

* 本的的另一得分重點(diǎn)在于表達(dá)程度的副詞。

By contrast, clothing and travel both had shrinkage in 2013, compared with their respective shares in 2003. The sales of clothing accounted for almost a quarter in 2003, and were only 16% in 2013, constituting the smallest part of the total sales.The tourism sector,accounting for 36%, was larger than the other sectors in 2003 and became the second largest in 2013 with its proportion being 29%.

* 本段的得分重點(diǎn)之一依然在于句子主語(yǔ)/句子開(kāi)頭的多樣性，使得整個(gè)段落的語(yǔ)言不單調(diào)。

* 本的的另一得分重點(diǎn)在于伴隨狀語(yǔ)、插入狀語(yǔ)、獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)。

# Conclusion

Clearly, the two years differ markedly.

* 如果可以有，還是有個(gè)結(jié)尾段為作文增色。

* 可以短小一句濃縮概括圖形的全貌，就可以了。