支招小作文（65） | 餅圖1：內(nèi)部比較與之間比較

* 數(shù)據(jù)圖：【餅圖】

* 主要描述：【比較】。注意：比較關(guān)系存在于每個(gè)餅內(nèi)部的板塊，也存在于餅之間。

# Introduction

Shown in the set of three pies are the average percentages of three substances consumed in Americans’ meals. in general, there are apparent similarities and notable differences. 

* 開頭段落中的第 一句話的劃線部分是老章反復(fù)提及的倒裝現(xiàn)象。

* 開頭段落中的第二句話，既是對(duì)圖表的總述，也是套話，還有詞匯得分點(diǎn)（表示程度的形容詞）。

# Body

老章強(qiáng)烈建議，在展開主體部分的寫作之前，對(duì)圖表中的信息進(jìn)行分組：找到異同。一般說(shuō)來(lái)，相同或相似在一組。然后，去對(duì)比于不同的一組。

First, the similarity between the intake of sodium and that of saturated fat is marked: in dinner, American people take in the largest portion (43% and 37% respectively) of a day’s whole amount of the two nutrients they consume. The second highest daily intake of sodium (29%) happens in lunch and is twice of the intake when Americans eat breakfast or snacks. Third, in terms of the consumption of saturated fat, there are no wide variations but a 5% difference between the meals except dinner.

The case with added sugar is vastly different. 42% – a predominating percentage – of added sugar is taken in during eating snacks, making a sharp contrast with the 16%-23% during the three regular meals.

* 最后這個(gè)段落，兩句話。第 一句話是用第三個(gè)餅去比較于前兩個(gè)餅。第二句話是第三個(gè)餅內(nèi)部的比較。

# Conclusion

Overall, since those substances may cause health problems if eaten in excessive amounts, Americans should be most careful when they eat dinner and snacks.

* 這個(gè)結(jié)尾段落的寫作內(nèi)容有一些難度。難點(diǎn)在于超越了數(shù)字，去解讀數(shù)據(jù)暗示的信息（但是注意，這個(gè)解讀是安全的，是基于題目中的“all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much”而來(lái)的）。