支招小作文 （60）| 線圖4：過去、變化和比較，線形很特別

數(shù)據(jù)圖：【線圖】

主要描述【變化】，可能描述【比較】。

時間【全部在過去】。

The graph shows the average height in different countries between 1775 and 1975.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

# Introduction

In the graph are four lines that represent four countries’ respective average heights of people over an extensive span of 200 years. The overview is clear: the whole 200-year period is split into two distinctly different phases. 表達程度的形容詞是小作文詞匯得分的絕 對重點之一。劃線的部分是倒裝現(xiàn)象，然后對four lines進行定語從句修飾，可以干脆背下來當套話用（這里的倒裝的實用目的是讓four lines在主句的最后面從而方便承接后面的長度可觀的定語從句）。

# Body

第 一句話介紹起點，老章的“羅列法”，簡便省心：In 1775, the heights, in decreasing order, were America’s 167cm, Britain’s 166cm, Denmark’s 163cm and 160cm in France. 第二句話把整個前100年宏觀寫，減少細枝末節(jié)的干擾：The subsequent roughly 100 years saw fluctuations within a narrowrange that is near the initial level, except in France, where people’s height started to increase steadily in about 1850. 剛剛結束的第二句要注意except后的內(nèi)容，是把一個特殊情況寫出來了。通過句型設計減少了一個獨立的句子造成的瑣碎感。It is also notable that the four countries were divided, as Americans and the British were generally taller than the Danish and the French. 最后這一句的內(nèi)容是需要觀察后才可能寫的。這一句注意兩個點：1、句型是主句+狀語從句，其中主句是形式主語指代主句從句的形式。2、英國人、丹麥人、法國人，這些“人”之前要有“the”。如遇中國人、日本人，同理有“the”。

這一段肯定是減少1875后的情況了。所以第 一句先寫一個宏觀： The year of 1875, splitting the whole period investigated, marks a new phase during which all four peoples’ average heights showed considerable growth. 同時注意第 一句的句型（時間為主語，后有分詞作狀語，再主句的賓語處用定語修飾）。接下來的寫法是“排序”，也就是按照幾個國家的順序來寫，基本上一個國家一個句子：In Denmark, the growth was tremendous, as people had grown to over 185cm by 1975 and taken the first place since 1900. Americans and the British had both grown to 180cm, and their heights had almost the same course of increase during the years. Last, the French remained less tall, measuring 175cm. 排序法本身已經(jīng)簡單，所以老章在句子內(nèi)部做了些語法設計（狀語從句、分句并列、伴隨狀語）。同時，注意這里用到了幾次過去完成時（強調(diào)“過去一段時間內(nèi)累積性的結果”）。

# Conclusion

因為在開頭段落里已經(jīng)有了對于圖的總述。所以就不要結尾段落了。這樣可以么？可以。那么在開頭段的圖的總述就必須有。也就是說，對于圖的總述，要么在開頭段落，要么在結尾段落，要么開頭和結尾都有（但是略有區(qū)別）。