提及雅思寫作,想沖高分的考鴨們都會想盡辦法使出渾身解數(shù)加入復(fù)雜句。但是,你認(rèn)為的“error free”的句子真的用對了嗎?首先讓我們一起看看我在網(wǎng)上摘抄的劍6 Test 1 小作文中的一個句子。
Brazil, where water consumption per person was 359 m3, had 26,500 km2 irrigated land, which was 265 times as large as that in Democractic Republic of Congo.
你覺得這個句子寫得好嗎?額...這個句子表面,實則邏輯不通。我們大多都在課堂上都學(xué)習(xí)過基本句子結(jié)構(gòu),定語狀語的表達(dá),還有各種從句,但在使用的時候卻往往忽略一個重要的原則。主句才是句子的核心,而定語狀語部分是作為修飾補(bǔ)充之用的。如此一來,上面那句話的核心是 Brazil had 26,500 km irrigated land, 而water consumption 變成了次要信息。而這真的是這組數(shù)據(jù)的重點嗎?看回表格,我們不難發(fā)現(xiàn)在該表格中第三列數(shù)據(jù)才是重點數(shù)據(jù)(跟表頭一致),而一二列的信息應(yīng)該是作為補(bǔ)充之用。那么,這一信息的核心應(yīng)該是 Water consumption per person in Brazil was 359 m3.而population和irrigated land 部分應(yīng)該是對Brazil 的補(bǔ)充信息。所以,如果非想用復(fù)雜句把這些信息寫在一起,那么表述參考大致如下:
Water consumption per person was up to 359 m3 in Brazil, where the amount of irrigated land was 26,500 km2, 265 times as large as that in Democractic Republic of Congo.
那怎樣才能正確的使用復(fù)雜句呢?很簡單,先分主次,主要信息寫主句,次要信息做定語或狀語。
舉個例子
劍橋6, Test 1, Task 1
在寫Car這組數(shù)據(jù)時,一般會涉及到兩個信息點:
1. Cars were the most popular traffic tools in both 1985 and 2000.
2. The average distance travelled by cars increased from 3,199 to 4,806 miles.
該題主要是為了對比1985年和2000 年的改變。
如此一來,如果想把兩個信息寫在同一句話,2句應(yīng)該作為主句,所以組合如下:
The average distance travelled by cars, the most popular traffic tools in both 1985 and 2000, increased from 3,199 to 4,806 miles.
當(dāng)然,所有脫離文章本身來談單個句子的邏輯的行為都是耍流氓,但希望在看完這篇文章后,大家都能留個心眼,在小作文中,千萬不要為了寫復(fù)雜句而寫復(fù)雜句,而在寫復(fù)雜句時,除了語法不要出錯,句子自身的主次信息也是很重要的哦!
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