5月24日雅思大作文真題：孩子們面臨更多壓力的原因及解決辦法

2018年05月24日 雅思大作文題目

“Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic (educational), social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.”

解析&審題

本題是一個(gè)典型的“報(bào)道型”（report）作文題目，要求考生對(duì)某個(gè)現(xiàn)象或問(wèn)題進(jìn)行原因分析，并給出解決辦法。本題是一個(gè)比較新的題目。

我們需要找到題目中的關(guān)鍵詞。

首先，children很關(guān)鍵，本題要求我們討論的主人公是“孩子”，因此本題不要過(guò)多討論大學(xué)生，更不可討論更寬泛意義上的“人”。

其次，題目中已經(jīng)給定了“學(xué)業(yè)”（academic）、“社會(huì)”（social）、“金錢(qián)”（commercial）三個(gè)層次的壓力，

因此討論原因的時(shí)候都要涉及（雖然可以根據(jù)情況進(jìn)行詳略選擇）。

以下是本題高分范文。

老師筆記 01

What do you think makes children unhappy today? Researchers are pointing at the pressures from various perspectives—academic, social and commercial. While the causes of these pressures seem clear enough, there are no simple measures toreduce them.

你認(rèn)為是什么讓今天的孩子們不開(kāi)心？研究人員指出是各類(lèi)壓力造成，包括學(xué)習(xí)、社會(huì)和金錢(qián)壓力。雖然這些壓力的原因似乎很清楚，卻沒(méi)有簡(jiǎn)單的措施來(lái)減少這些壓力。

解析

（1）本范文開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，直接提出問(wèn)題（孩子們?yōu)槭裁磯毫υ絹?lái)越大），然后提出自己的觀點(diǎn)（解決不容易）。

（2）point at 指向......

（3）perspective 角度

（4）reduce 減少；減輕

02

It is easy to explain why children are facing academic, social and commercial pressures. Firstly, although as parents there are few pleasures greater than their children succeeding at school, sometimes the pressure is way too much. Parents’unrealistically high expectations can backfireseverely and end up causing their children to be unhappy. Secondly, all children have to face peer pressure in school, which is generally beneficial to kids’ growth, yet the ugly reality is that peer pressure reaches its highest intensity at just the age when children tend to be so insensitive, unkind, even cruel as to purposefully make others unhappy. Thirdly, children are easily affected by advertising that attracts them to buy things they cannot possibly afford, and as a result, they may feel unhappy.

很容易解釋為什么孩子們面臨著學(xué)業(yè)、社會(huì)和金錢(qián)壓力。首先，盡管父母的快樂(lè)就是孩子在學(xué)校取得成功，但有時(shí)他們施加的壓力太過(guò)了。父母不切實(shí)際的高期望值可能會(huì)適得其反，最終導(dǎo)致孩子不快樂(lè)。第二，所有的孩子在學(xué)校都要面對(duì)同齡人的壓力，這通常有利于孩子的成長(zhǎng)，但丑陋的現(xiàn)實(shí)是，同齡人壓力達(dá)到最強(qiáng)烈的年齡正是孩子們不敏感，不友好，甚至是殘酷到故意讓別人不開(kāi)心的年齡。第三，兒童很容易受到廣告的影響，這些廣告吸引他們購(gòu)買(mǎi)他們負(fù)擔(dān)不起的東西，因此他們可能為此感到不開(kāi)心。

解析

（1）本段討論孩子們?yōu)槭裁疵媾R各種壓力，提出三個(gè)原因：來(lái)自父母的原因，來(lái)自同齡人的原因，來(lái)自廣告的原因，分別涉及學(xué)業(yè)壓力（父母的高期望值）、社會(huì)壓力（同齡競(jìng)爭(zhēng)）、金錢(qián)壓力（廣告的影響）。這些原因不難想到，但請(qǐng)各位烤鴨注意范文在語(yǔ)言表達(dá)方面的節(jié)奏和技巧（尤其是從句的使用）。

（2）pleasure 快樂(lè)；愉悅

（3）way too much 太過(guò)了

（4）unrealistically 不切實(shí)際地

（5）backfire 回火；事與愿違

（6）end up 最終落得個(gè)......

（7）peer pressure 同齡人壓力

（8）intensity 強(qiáng)度

（9）purposefully 有意地

（10）afford 負(fù)擔(dān)得起

03

Though it is never easy to fix these feelings of unhappiness, there are possible measures to be taken to enhance the wellbeing of children who are under constant pressures. To begin with, parents have to draw a line on the expectations of their children and find out their true potentials, rather than pushing them to unrealistic limits. Meanwhile, with patience and guidance, parents should keep an eye on their children who fall victims to online pressure through social networking.Simultaneously, the authorities should do more to regulate advertising that are intended for children who are anxious to buy unnecessary things.

盡管克服這些不快樂(lè)的感覺(jué)從來(lái)都不容易，但我們可能會(huì)采取一些措施來(lái)提高長(zhǎng)期處于壓力中的孩子的幸福感。首先，父母要給孩子們的期望劃一條線，發(fā)現(xiàn)他們真正的潛力，而不是把他們逼到不切實(shí)際的極限。同時(shí)，在耐心和引導(dǎo)下，父母應(yīng)該關(guān)注那些在社交網(wǎng)絡(luò)上承受網(wǎng)絡(luò)壓力的孩子們。同時(shí)，政府應(yīng)該做更多的工作來(lái)規(guī)范針對(duì)兒童的廣告，因?yàn)閮和偸瞧炔患按刭?gòu)買(mǎi)并不必要的東西。

解析

（1）本段討論解決辦法。一般說(shuō)來(lái)，解決辦法應(yīng)該針對(duì)前文提出的原因。這里的解決辦法有三：一、父母調(diào)整自己的期待值；二、警惕孩子在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上的同伴壓力；三、政府規(guī)范兒童廣告。這些解決辦法完全針對(duì)第二段中分析到的三個(gè)原因。

（2）fix 解決

（3）enhance 提高

（4）constant 長(zhǎng)期的

（5）potential 潛力（的）

（6）keep an eye on... 關(guān)注......

（7）fall victim to... 淪為......的犧牲品

（8）simultaneously 同時(shí)

04

In conclusion, there are no easy solutions to the increasing academic, social, and commercial pressures children face today. Frankly, I am quitepessimistic because those factors that bring pressures to children are not likely to go away, at least in the foreseeable future.

總之，對(duì)于孩子今天面臨的日益增長(zhǎng)的學(xué)業(yè)、社會(huì)和金錢(qián)壓力，沒(méi)有容易的解決辦法。坦白地說(shuō)，我很悲觀，因?yàn)槟切┙o孩子們帶來(lái)壓力的因素，至少在可預(yù)見(jiàn)的將來(lái)是不可能消失的。

解析

（1）本段為結(jié)論段，重申觀點(diǎn)。好的結(jié)尾段應(yīng)該包括兩個(gè)內(nèi)容：一是對(duì)前文的總結(jié)，二是適當(dāng)?shù)难由臁Ｒ虼?，好作文的結(jié)尾段通常都是兩句話組成。

（2）frankly 坦白地說(shuō)

（3）pessimistic 悲觀的

（4）in the foreseeable future 在可見(jiàn)的未來(lái)

本場(chǎng)考試范文

What do you think makes children unhappy today? Researchers are pointing at the pressures from various perspectives—academic, social and commercial. While the causes of these pressures seem clear enough, there are no simple measures to reduce them.

It is easy to explain why children are facing academic, social and commercial pressures. Firstly, although as parents there are few pleasures greater than their children succeeding at school, sometimes the pressure is way too much. Parents’ unrealistically high expectations can backfire severely and end up causing their children to be unhappy. Secondly, all children have to face peer pressure in school, which is generally beneficial to kids’ growth, yet the ugly reality is that peer pressure reaches its highest intensity at just the age when children tend to be so insensitive, unkind, even cruel as to purposefully make others unhappy. Thirdly, children are easily affected by advertising that attracts them to buy things they cannot possibly afford, and as a result, they may feel unhappy.

Though it is never easy to fix these feelings of unhappiness, there are possible measures to be taken to enhance the wellbeing of children who are under constant pressures. To begin with, parents have to draw a line on the expectations of their children and find out their true potentials, rather than pushing them to unrealistic limits. Meanwhile, with patience and guidance, parents should keep an eye on their children who fall victims to online pressure through social networking. Simultaneously, the authorities should do more to regulate advertising that are intended for children who are anxious to buy unnecessary things.

In conclusion, there are no easy solutions to the increasing academic, social, and commercial pressures children face today. Frankly, I am quite pessimistic because those factors that bring pressures to children are not likely to go away, at least in the foreseeable future.

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