從雅思大作文看如何拿到雅思寫作七分

雅思寫作一直是我們的難題，我們的閱讀和聽力可以拿到8分甚至再高的分數(shù)，但是很少人能夠拿到雅思寫作七分及以上，雅思寫作就真的那么難寫么?我們一起來看以8月20日的雅思大作文為例怎么樣去寫一篇七分以上的作文!

8月26日的雅思大作文題目是：

Some people think charity organisations should help people in great need wherever they live. However, others think they should help people in their own country. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

仔細審題，我們會發(fā)現(xiàn)題目要求我們討論的觀點是：慈善機構應該幫助所有人，還是僅幫助自己國家的人?這個題目非常有意思，可以從多方面加以討論，但是相對于一般的教育類話題、環(huán)保類話題等，這個話題可能對有些“兩耳不聞窗外事，一心只讀圣賢書”的學生會構成不小的挑戰(zhàn)。當然，有些同學英語詞匯量不夠，連charity是什么意思都不明白，那這個作文對他們而言就是簡直了!

那么，究竟如何構思這篇作文呢?我們可能會本能地覺得，慈善機構應該幫助本國的人，因為慈善機構的錢主要來自本國，但是，在這個全球化的時代，很多慈善機構的錢難道不是來自世界各地嗎?何況，慈善機構的宗旨就是幫助人類克服困難，救助扶持社會中的困難人士，從某種意義上，我們也可以說，在這個全球化時代，幫助其他國家的人本質(zhì)上也是在幫助自己國家。這樣，好像我們又可以認為慈善機構應該幫助世界上所有需要幫助的人(people in need)。如果我們進一步思考，將慈善機構分為“地區(qū)性的慈善機構”和“全球性的慈善機構”，那么這個問題就更容易討論：地區(qū)性的慈善機構主要應該幫助本國人(有余力的時候幫助外國人)，全球性的慈善機構則應放眼全球，哪里需要就到哪里去。

將題目中的關鍵詞進行細分，然后分別討論，是雅思寫作的重要應對策略之一。比如，就“網(wǎng)絡電影能否取代電影院”，我們就可細分，就一般電影而言，網(wǎng)絡完全可以取代電影院，但對于那些特別依賴特殊效果的電影而言，網(wǎng)絡不可能取代電影院;就年輕一代而言，他們可能更愿意在網(wǎng)上看電影，但就年紀比較大的觀眾而言，他們寧愿去電影院，等等。大家可以試著用這種“關鍵詞細分法”去破題，在很多情況下都能柳暗花明，解決你無話可說的窘境。

7分范文：

Charity organisations are supposed to offer help to people in great need, such as those suffering from incurable diseases, natural disasters and unexpected accidents. Yet one issue is still in debate: to whom should the money of charity organisations go, exclusively to people who live in the same country as the organisations, or to all people regardless of where they live? To my mind, the answer to this question depends largely on the mission of specific charity organisations.

One important reason why some people hold the same-country view is that, as they see it, the charity money comes from the rich people and other donators who live in the same country as those needy people, and naturally the charity organisations should help them rather than people from other countries. This is partly true, especially to the local charity groups whose chief concern is to solve the local problems. Yet for such organisations as Bill Gates Charity Foundation whose money comes from the entire world, it is far from enough only to help Americans, although it is headquartered in the U.S. As a matter of fact, Bill Gates Charity Foundation, along with other “global” charity groups, has extended its help to all people in all countries and regions throughout the world.

Besides, there are charity organisations that address different issues, some of which being daily necessities, others being disease control, environmental protection, to name only a few. Some of these issues are local while others are global in nature. Generally, local charity groups play a more important role in addressing local issues though outside help is also always welcomed, while in face of those global issues like disease control or environmental protection, charity organisations need to travel across territorial borders and offer help to those who live in any part of the world.

To conclude, where the charity money should go is mainly determined by the chief concerns and missions of different charity organisations. An organisation aiming at solving local issues should spend its money helping people who live in the same country, but if an organisation sets its eyes on global issues, it should not confine itself to a single country. (357 words)

老師筆記：

Charity organisations are supposed to offer help to people in great need, such as those suffering from incurable diseases, natural disasters and unexpected accidents. Yet one issue is still in debate: to whom should the money of charity organisations go, exclusively to people who live in the same country as the organisations, or to all people regardless of where they live? To my mind, the answer to this question depends largely on the mission of specific charity organisations.

開頭段，先定義charity organisation引出話題，然后重述題目中的問題，最后提出自己的觀點。請注意：唐老師沒有照抄原題，而是對其進行了重新表述，這是語言表達水平的一個重要方面，學生需要不斷練習才能真正提升這個能力。

such as... 往往能夠給我們提供一個機會來展示我們的知識水平。這里的such as those suffering from...完全可以不要，但正是這個such as后面的內(nèi)容，讓考官看到了學生的知識面和表達力。

to my mind,... 是一個很有用的短語，意思為“我認為”。多數(shù)學生會使用in my view, in my opinion, as far as I am concerned。

看一看老師在本段使用的幾個副詞(組)。exclusively = only; regardless of = no matter; largely = mainly

One important reason why some people hold the same-country view is that, as they see it, the charity money comes from the rich people and other donators who live in the same country as those needy people, and naturally the charity organisations should help them rather than people from other countries. This is partly true, especially to the local charity groups whose chief concern is to solve the local problems. Yet for such organisations as Bill Gates Charity Foundation whose money comes from the entire world, it is far from enough only to help Americans, although it is headquartered in the U.S. As a matter of fact, Bill Gates Charity Foundation, along with other “global” charity groups, has extended its help to all people in all countries and regions throughout the world.

本段論證不同規(guī)模不同性質(zhì)的慈善機構使用錢的方向不同。區(qū)分兩類慈善機構：地區(qū)性的和全球性的。

As they see it,... 在他們看來

This is partly true,... 這有一半是正確的

It is far from enough to... 做......遠遠不夠

As a matter of fact = in fact, actually 事實上

Besides, there are charity organisations that address different issues, some of which being daily necessities, others being disease control, environmental protection, to name only a few. Some of these issues are local while others are global in nature. Generally, local charity groups play a more important role in addressing local issues though outside help is also always welcomed, while in face of those global issues like disease control or environmental protection, charity organisations need to travel across territorial borders and offer help to those who live in any part of the world.

本段論證解決不同問題的慈善機構使用錢的方向也不同，將慈善機構分為解決區(qū)域問題的機構和解決全球性問題的機構。

to name only a few相當于“等等”，多數(shù)同學會用and so on...

while在這里引導轉折，相當于but。

To conclude, where the charity money should go is mainly determined by the chief concerns and missions of different charity organisations. An organisation aiming at solving local issues should spend its money helping people who live in the same country, but if an organisation sets its eyes on global issues, it should not confine itself to a single country.

本段為結尾段，對前文論述的內(nèi)容進行重新概括，注意在用語上要與前文保持一定差異。

必須學習本段用不同句型來表達近似內(nèi)容的方法。an organisation aiming at solving local issues... = if an organisation aims at solving local issues, it ...

參考譯文：

慈善組織應為急需幫助的人提供幫助，比如身患不治之癥的人，遭受自然災害的人，和遭遇意外事故的人。然而，有一個問題仍在爭論中：慈善組織的錢到底該用在誰身上，應該用于與機構同一國家的人呢，還是用于所有人，不管他們出身在哪?在我看來，這個問題的答案在很大程度上取決于特定慈善組織的使命。

有些人持同一國家觀點，其重要理由是：在他們看來，用于慈善的錢來自于富人及其他捐資人，他們與那些需要這些錢的人生活在同一個國家，因此，慈善組織理應幫助他們，而不是其他國家的人。這個觀點有一定的正確性，尤其是對那些主要致力于解決本國問題的慈善機構。然而，對于像比爾.蓋茨慈善基金會這樣的組織而言(它的錢來自全世界)，雖然其總部在美國，但若只幫助美國人就遠遠不夠了。事實上，比爾.蓋茨慈善基金會，還有其他類似的“全球”慈善機構，已經(jīng)將他們的幫助延伸到了世界上所有國家和地區(qū)的人們。

此外，不同的慈善組織解決不同的問題，有些問題是日常需要的，有些則是關于疾病控制和環(huán)境保護的，等等。本質(zhì)上，這些問題有些是區(qū)域性的，有些則是全球性的。一般而言，在解決區(qū)域問題時，區(qū)域性的慈善機構扮演了更重要的角色(雖然外面的幫助總是受到歡迎)，而面對諸如疾病控制或環(huán)境保護這樣的全球性問題時，慈善機構需要跨越領土邊界，給世界上任何角落的人提供援助。

總之，慈善款應用于何處，主要取決于不同慈善組織的首要關注點和使命。致力于解決區(qū)域問題的機構應該將善款用于幫助生活在同一國家的人，但是如果一個機構關注全球問題，那它就不應該局限在一個國家了。

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